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In darkness whisper secrets,
Of stories never told.
Share your hopes and share your dreams,
Until your blood runs cold.

In the light I’ll keep them,
In an illusion that is real.
I will mould the world around you,
To erase everything you feel.

Trust me or deceive me,
Either will be my due.
In the end I will be victorious,
In the end I’m you.
Written as an add in to a book I am currently working on. What do you think?
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Chocoramalted Mar 28, 2014  New member Hobbyist Writer
I really like this.
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:iconbladdneart:
Bladdneart Mar 26, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I'd turn off sunshine
So colors won't fade
I'd tie up spring breezes
So scents must stay!
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Cumminstgoler Feb 27, 2014  New member Hobbyist Writer
Great job!
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:iconmcgreevy:
Mcgreevy Feb 26, 2014  New member Professional Digital Artist
really nice writing keep it up never stop :)
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:iconstefanmst:
Your poem is very intriguing and gives me a feeling of solitude. The end somehow seems positive to me... It's a nice poem! Good work!
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:iconwiliart:
Wiliart Dec 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nice poem, doesn't look like a happy part of the book though.
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:icontulf42:
tulf42 Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Definitely got my attention!
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0p1Tx Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
nice!
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SpiderlilyHiganbana Aug 26, 2013  Student General Artist
I love this... I really love poetry in general that leaves a bitter taste in your mouth. Hope to read more from you!
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:icondragonrider4000:
Thank you! I hope you like my future work.
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